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Post by Dhodrimme Rualanna on May 2, 2006 22:46:45 GMT -5
Realm of Dream
Where the dreams of life fulfill complete
The stars guide your wearied feet
To rest beside sweet waters of life
Where from your mind drops all strife
Dream this dream where peace dwells deep
In this land where none will weep
Where pains drift away from thought
Burdens vanish which life had brought
Here where Dream meets the real world
The glory of life is unfurled
Live full every moment given you
And you shall find happiness true
Lady Dhodrimme Rualanna |
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Post by Haldir Ithillen on May 3, 2006 22:30:01 GMT -5
O.O!!! WOW!!! I like it!!
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Post by Dhodrimme Rualanna on May 4, 2006 6:14:39 GMT -5
Thank you *takes a bow*
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Post by revontulet on May 22, 2006 7:30:47 GMT -5
It's magical... It makes me feel I'm floating in a dream, somewhere beyond this world. The same feeling I try to reach when I write my poems - true magic, I have to say. I can see your writings come from your heart.
In some way it reminds me of Lórien of Aman. I can't remember much of Quenta Silmarillion right now so I can't write what I have in mind. Anyway, a place of Dream, which is not even a place. A state of mind perhaps?
Beautiful. To create magic with words is a gift.
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Post by Dhodrimme Rualanna on May 23, 2006 17:01:37 GMT -5
Thank you, dear friend, for your generous compliments! I am pleased my writing reaches as deep as it has, though I'm sure if you ask an expert, I most likely made several technical errors concerning length and number of words and such... I never was one to get into the complicated form of poetry *chuckles* I learned writing mostly just by doing it, and doing alot of it... helps to have a Mom who practically majored in it through college.
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Post by revontulet on May 24, 2006 5:51:47 GMT -5
There is a huge difference between two kinds of poetry (in my opinion). In some poetry it's about life and death to have the right number of words and lines and such. For example in Japanese haikus you must have five syllables on the first line, seven on the second and five on the last line. The traditional Finnish poetry is written with eight syllables on each line (partly because people used to sing the poems). This is strict poetry.
Modern poetry doesn't have rules like that. And when I think about poetry, for me it's not about the number of words (if it doesn't sound annoying). When I read a poem, it's more important what feelings I get from it. That's poetry -making the reader feel something special. The words can fly free without rules, only what you see and hear beautiful. It's not maths but art.
And, my friend, you have managed to create poetry. Real art.
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Post by Dhodrimme Rualanna on May 24, 2006 7:41:38 GMT -5
*smiles brightly and bows, blushing slightly* Thank you, mellon nin, though you give me far more praise than I deserve, but I accept it gratefully... words such as yours inspire one to continue *smiles* Thank you once again
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Post by Eleniel on Jun 20, 2006 11:35:51 GMT -5
Very good poem.
"Live full every moment given you
And you shall find happiness true"
Beautiful message - and so true.
I agree with Revon, it could describe Aman.
I don't know much about poetry, but I can feel it when some touches my heart. For me... as you might have figured out by now, word flow and choice of words are crucial to me. Also structure and the number of syllables can change everything in a poem.
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Post by Dhodrimme Rualanna on Jun 21, 2006 7:28:18 GMT -5
Aye, I go by flow of words and how easily and fluidly they can be spoken.... I never gave much thought to syllables, but some people don't....
*smiles* Thank you *takes a slight bow*
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